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PostSubject: Altrai   Sat Aug 07, 2010 1:15 am

Themesong:

Ezio In Florence
Assassin's Creed II

Age: 25
Gender: Male
Race: Half-Elf
Birthplace: N/A
Skill: Swordfighting

Biography: Altrai was a Member of Surna for many years, Participating in lots of events such as the Otherworld attack and when the Giants raided for Vincent Dadoni, Infact he was his Superior in the Ranking of the Guard, Altrai was mainly known, As the Staff Sargeant Steven Rodgers. But lately he seemed to have given up his post on the force, for a more subtle lifestyle. Altrai left Surna, In search of a calmer place to settle down in for a while, But the call of Surna brought him back many times, He remembers always walking up that hill to those tall town gates. Altrai, Or Steven, Had always been there to help his superiors Such as Zayl and Thorn Razel. After a while Steven changed, Deciding to unofficially change his name to Altrai, Keeping it Short and simple and only helping people who had something to do with him, Or if he wished to help them. He targets Criminals and such, Like he did in the Guard Except why his change in Spirit and Mind is unknown. (I tried my best to rough one together with what i can spare without completely ruining my entire plan for this character. If its rusty and lazy, Just know I tried.)

Alignment: Neutrel Good
Favored Enemys: Criminals
Favored Weapon: His Swords
Deity: N/A
Current Task:
Watch over Surna - Eternal


+Inventory+
-Clothes- Look at picture
Add Hood
-Weaponary-
Regular longsword
Red Longsword
-Misc-
Wooden Pendant
Strange Symbol'd Rock

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(Props to Kal for the Picture, Editing it further if you want to is still optional.)

(And yes, Altrai looks like Altair, I am aware, I'm not good with Names. Soo i give Credit of the name alteration and Song to The Creators of the AC Series.)


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PostSubject: Re: Altrai   Sat Aug 07, 2010 1:31 am

(Keeping for future, just incase)


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PostSubject: Re: Altrai   Sat Aug 07, 2010 3:11 am

Is that Kyo?
That looks like Kyo.

// id edit it if wasnt going to bed lol//
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PostSubject: Re: Altrai   Sat Aug 07, 2010 3:29 am

While I approve of this character;

Olden needs more Steven and Laura.
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PostSubject: Re: Altrai   Sat Aug 07, 2010 7:29 am

Altrai and Altair? Coincidence? I think not...
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PostSubject: Re: Altrai   Sat Aug 07, 2010 8:27 am

that's what i thought too, graley

looks cool and i accept even though it's already accepted i think
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PostSubject: Re: Altrai   Sat Aug 07, 2010 9:16 am

Eh. It's only a slight rip. Nothing too majour, plus it's his first character.

Character page is fairly sufficient...though i'm curious about this so called 'Red Longsword'.

Are you perhaps operating under 40k Orkish lore that 'RED FINGS GO FASTA', OW' YA' NOT KNOW THAT YER GROK?!'.

Apart from slightly obvious name rip, my only other critism is the lack of bio....
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PostSubject: Re: Altrai   Sat Aug 07, 2010 9:21 am

lol icaso's an old potato he's had characters before
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PostSubject: Re: Altrai   Sat Aug 07, 2010 9:48 am

Correct, link, didn't notice.

Assumed.

Assumed wrong.

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PostSubject: Re: Altrai   Sat Aug 07, 2010 12:03 pm

Phry wrote:
Eh. It's only a slight rip. Nothing too majour, plus it's his first character.

Character page is fairly sufficient...though i'm curious about this so called 'Red Longsword'.

Are you perhaps operating under 40k Orkish lore that 'RED FINGS GO FASTA', OW' YA' NOT KNOW THAT YER GROK?!'.

Apart from slightly obvious name rip, my only other critism is the lack of bio....

The Lack of Bio is because its to be found out about this character
As people will talk to him and his trust with people re-grows, He'll tell people about his past, Which i will add to the Bio.

And about the "Red" sword, Literally since before it has been apped, "Long time ago on the old forums" its considered some fancy red sword, And i guess i'll keep it that way.

Graley wrote:
Altrai and Altair? Coincidence? I think not...

Coincidence? I Believe yes, Since i'm horrible with names, Take my first character

"Steven RODGERS" Generic much? But atleast its not a complete Copywrite of anything.

link711 wrote:
i accept even though it's already accepted i think

Thing i do, Always did it before "Applying for a Character thats pretty much normal" was made.

Anymore Critism?


And on a side note
Zaku350 wrote:
While I approve of this character;

Olden needs more Steven and Laura.

Laura i can do, Steven.. Well i have /other/ plans in mind for him involving Altrai
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PostSubject: Re: Altrai   Sat Aug 07, 2010 12:21 pm

Eh...these apps are supposed to be OOC. Not including a bio makes little sense, seems sliiiightly lazy.
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PostSubject: Re: Altrai   Sat Aug 07, 2010 12:25 pm

Phry wrote:
Eh...these apps are supposed to be OOC. Not including a bio makes little sense, seems sliiiightly lazy.


Icaso wrote:
The Lack of Bio is because its to be found out about this character
As people will talk to him and his trust with people re-grows, He'll tell people about his past, Which i will add to the Bio.


It means i'll add as i progress with the character. And it already is mostly ooc, but the Bio i wanted to keep in a First person perspective of someone ELSE


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PostSubject: Re: Altrai   Sat Aug 07, 2010 12:28 pm

Yes, Icaso, i can read.

I don't understand why you quoted what i just replied to.

In my understanding apps are supposed to be OOC. Slowly revealing the bio as people find it out IC just sounds like a way to dodge even writing one, under the hope that peoplee will ignore a character page that is no longer getting bumped.

I don't mean to accuse, but i don't know you at all, and therefore cannot give you the benefit of the doubt.
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PostSubject: Re: Altrai   Sat Aug 07, 2010 12:32 pm

Phry wrote:
Yes, Icaso, i can read.

I don't understand why you quoted what i just replied to.

In my understanding apps are supposed to be OOC. Slowly revealing the bio as people find it out IC just sounds like a way to dodge even writing one, under the hope that peoplee will ignore a character page that is no longer getting bumped.

I don't mean to accuse, but i don't know you at all, and therefore cannot give you the benefit of the doubt.

Yes sorry, I revised and edited my Post too late, Appologies, And yes i'm aware of that, But in my case, I put it like that to attempt to influence people to rp with this character and find out who he is.

If its a huge bother to everyone, I can make a Biography
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PostSubject: Re: Altrai   Sat Aug 07, 2010 12:43 pm

It's only really me. If nobody else minds, then don't bother.
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PostSubject: Re: Altrai   Sat Aug 07, 2010 1:02 pm

i'm not a fan of the ic backstory. i agree with phry, it does seem lazy.
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PostSubject: Re: Altrai   Sat Aug 07, 2010 1:28 pm

link711 wrote:
i'm not a fan of the ic backstory. i agree with phry, it does seem lazy.

Alright then, That makes two, I'll make the Biography.

EDIT: I Tried, And if i failed, So be it, I didnt want to remove all of my Rp plan for this character by using the biography
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PostSubject: Re: Altrai   Sat Aug 07, 2010 3:48 pm

Right ill give this a Accept for what its worth, i mean we all go to start some where right, just dont turn into someone that makes like 10 charecters... fuzzy
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PostSubject: Re: Altrai   Sat Aug 07, 2010 6:11 pm

Reanimated wrote:
Right ill give this a Accept for what its worth, i mean we all go to start some where right, just dont turn into someone that makes like 10 charecters... fuzzy
\

Reanimated, I dont mean to pick at anything, But uhh, I kinda know about Where to start and stuff, Hence the fact i have mutliple other characters..


Anyways, Constructive Critism from now on Please. Last time i posted one of these things was a couple months ago, So mind the rust everywhere.
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PostSubject: Re: Altrai   Sat Aug 07, 2010 6:14 pm

You all know that Icaso has been in Olden as long as me, right?

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PostSubject: Re: Altrai   Sat Aug 07, 2010 6:20 pm

Yep.. Good ol' days with Drak' n' Geo. Good times..
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PostSubject: Re: Altrai   Sat Aug 07, 2010 7:49 pm

Imma edit the picture, though I'm not the best xDD

Oh and, you know if you take pictures off dA, saving them as a PNG makes the quality much better.

EDIT:

my god
i couldnt tell what was hair and what wasnt
there you go VVV

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PostSubject: Re: Altrai   Sat Aug 07, 2010 8:25 pm

Yeah that was my fault for accidently thinking he was a newfag.
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PostSubject: Re: Altrai   Sat Aug 07, 2010 11:36 pm

OLDFAGS, NEWFAGS.

Wherever you turn, whatever you call them, they're still fags.

Sad

No, I don't intend on adding to this thread at all.

But I'm glad someone has come back.
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PostSubject: Re: Altrai   Sun Aug 08, 2010 1:03 pm

PuPeT-KaI wrote:
Imma edit the picture, though I'm not the best xDD

Oh and, you know if you take pictures off dA, saving them as a PNG makes the quality much better.

EDIT:

my god
i couldnt tell what was hair and what wasnt
there you go VVV

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Thank you Kal for your efforts, Works better than the current one.


And yes, Apparently i am an Oldfag.
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